ESP and PBLL - EDITING By Arlu Zahra Zalika

 ESP EDITING By Arlu Zahra Zalika

Writer : Putri Sa’adah 

Editor : Arlu Zahra Zalika

List of activities in ESP for Photography Business

1. Short Article about Photography

2. 5W1H Questions

3. Verbal and Nominal Sentences

4. Tenses and It’s Pattern

5. Active and Passive Construction

6. List of Vocabulary

7. Translation into Indonesia

8. Reasons Why Writer Uses Tenses

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1. Short Article about Photography

 

Wildlife Photography : Wildlife Education Through Photography Media

 

Indonesia is a country that is crossed by the equatorial emerald line and has a tropical climate. This geographical condition causes the abundance of biodiversity, both flora, and fauna, to be found in Indonesia. This potential should be used as a learning platform for the younger generation so that knowledge about biodiversity continues to grow so that in the future it can be a provision to love and keep this biodiversity sustainable. One way of education that is easily accepted and understood by the wider community regarding fauna is through the media of photography.

 

Nowadays, the term "Wildlife Photography" is increasingly being heard and found because of the increasingly successful use of existing media, both digital and conventional. National geographic (Geographic), BBC, to books related to wildlife there must be a visualization of the wildlife being discussed. Even wildlife identification books, which are often discussed in lectures, also do not escape the subject of photography as part of clarifying the picture of the wild animals to be identified. However, many people do not realize that Wildlife Photography is an inseparable part of today's wildlife learning model.

 

As the name implies, Wildlife Photography, this field of photography focuses on capturing wildlife in the wild. It's not like photographing animals in a zoo, or in captivity. Wildlife photography requires photographers not only to take pictures but also to be able to tell what and why the wildlife behaves like this so that later the message or content of the photo can be conveyed properly to readers and connoisseurs. In producing wildlife photos, a photographer can spend months living in the wild, both just to observe the patterns and behavior of the target, to getting (get) ready to find the best position and time to take pictures.

 

“Photographing is not just taking pictures”, this sentence is suitable to be embedded in wildlife photo hunting activities. This is because photographing wildlife is different from photographing other objects, there are many things that must (many things must) be prepared and the ethics that must be considered in photographing these wildlife (this wildlife). Some preparations such as research on behavior and habitat conditions regarding the types of animals to be photographed to the preparation of camera equipment and location permits are absolute to be prepared before the shooting process. Therefore, it can be said that wildlife photography can teach us how to coexist with wild animals without disturbing and destroying their habitat.

 

One of the results that can be enjoyed by the wider community from the existence of Wildlife Photography is books and magazines about wildlife which are now scattered everywhere. Learning to use image (images) or photo media is also considered good in use and applied in the teaching and learning process as an educational medium because this image media tends to attract students' hearts so that motivation will appear to be more curious about the images described. More than that, Wildlife Photography encourages to (us to) continue to love biodiversity, especially wildlife, and participate in introducing wildlife to the wider community so that if it is properly educated, it is hoped that the rate of extinction of wild animals can be suppressed and avoided.

 

 

A. 5W1H Questions

Instruction: Referring to the Company Profile You have, please build each two examples of your sentences Question and Answer based on 5W1H (Who, What, Where, Why, When, How).

 

CLUES FOR BUILDING SENTENCES
WH	Meaning	Example
Who	Person	Who is your favorite idol in Photography Business?
What	Things, Ideas, Information, Action	What are you bringing in bag? (Thing) What are you thinking about Photography Business? (Idea) What kind of Photography Book do you wish to buy? (Info) What are you doing with Photography Business? (Action)
Where	Place	Where is my book entitled Guide to Photo Book?
Why	Reason	Why did you bring that photo book?
When	Time	When is his son’s birthday?
Which	Choice	Which design style of academic book do you like more?
Whose	Possession	Whose book on the table?
How	Manner	How did you convince customer about photography business? How do you choose a book cover? How do you make an attractive book cover?
How many	Quantity	How many photography books does she have?
How much	Quantity	How many photo book do you need?
How often	Frequency	How often do you read books?
How far	Distance	How far is it from your house to the campus?
How old	Age	How old are you? How long Duration How long will the test be?

SENTENCE BUILDING

No	WH	Sentence Building (Question and Answer)
1	Who	Who wrote the article?
	Answer	The article is Akbar Wahyu Illahi
2	Who	Who should know about biodiversity?
	Answer	The younger generation.
3	What	What is meant by wildlife photography?
	Answer	Wildlife Photography is books and magazines about wildlife which are (that are) now scattered everywhere.
4	What	What are the benefits of flora and fauna biodiversity in Indonesia?
	Answer	This potential should be used as a learning platform for the younger generation, knowledge about biodiversity continues to grow so that in the future it can be a provision to love and maintain sustainable biodiversity.
5	Where	Where to find photos of wild animals?
	Answer	in the forest and park.
6	Where	Where the results can be enjoyed by the wider community with the presence of wildlife Photography?
	Answer	One of the results that can be enjoyed by the wider community from the existence of Wildlife Photography is books and magazines about wildlife which are now scattered everywhere.
7	Why	Why should wildlife photography?
	Answer	Found because of the success of existing media, both digital and conventional.
8	Why	Why wildlife photography is so useful nowadays?
	Answer	it is Wildlife Photography that encourages to keep loving biodiversity, especially wildlife, and participates in introducing wildlife to the wider community so that if it is properly educated, it is hoped that the rate of extinction of wildlife can be prevented and avoided.
9	When	When is the best time for a photographer to take pictures?
	Answer	A photographer can spend months living in the wild, both just to observe the patterns and behavior of the target.
10	When	When wildlife photography is part of a wildlife learning model?
	Answer	many people do not realize that Wildlife Photography is an inseparable part of today's wildlife learning model.
11	How	How to prepare before the shooting process?
	Answer	Some preparations such as research on behavior and habitat conditions regarding the types of animals to be photographed to the preparation of camera equipment and location.
12	How	How to do education that is easily accepted and understood by the wider community related to fauna?
	Answer	One way of education that is easily accepted and understood by the wider community regarding fauna is through the media of photography.

 

 

B. Verbal and Nominal Sentences

Clues: Verbal sentences (V) are those, which start with a verb. Non- verbal sentences start with a noun or pronoun, or with derivative nouns. Verbal sentences consist of a verb + subject + object or adverbial phrase. The subject and object can be either nouns or pronouns. Nominal sentence (N) also known as equational sentence is a linguistic term that refers to a nonverbal sentence (i.e. a sentence without a finite verb). As a nominal sentence does not have a verbal predicate, it may contain a nominal predicate, an adjectival predicate, in Semitic languages also an adverbial predicate or even a prepositional predicate.

 

No	Sentences	V	N
01	many people do not realize that Wildlife Photography is an inseparable part of today's wildlife learning model.	V
02	Wildlife photography requires photographers not only to take pictures	V
03	Indonesia is a country that is crossed by the equatorial emerald line and has a tropical climate.		V
04	“Photographing is not just taking pictures”, this sentence is suitable to be embedded in wildlife photo hunting activities.		V
05	photographing wildlife is different from photographing other objects		V
06	One way of education that is easily accepted and understood by the wider community regarding fauna is through the media of photography.		V
07	which are often discussed in the world of lectures	V
08	This is based on the fact		V
09	This potential should be used as a learning platform	V
10	Photographer (A photographer) takes a picture	V

 

C. Active and Passive Construction

Clues: Active sentence is a sentence where the subject performs the action of the verb. For example: John kicked the ball. ("John" is the subject. "John" is performing the action of the verb "kick." Therefore, this is an active sentence.) An active sentence is the opposite of a passive sentence. In a passive sentence, the action of the main verb is done to the subject. The passive voice occurs when the person or thing that performs an action is not the grammatical subject of the sentence. Instead, the person or thing that receives the action is placed before the verb. Passive sentences are formed using the verb to be combined with a past participle.

 

 

 

No	Sentences	Active	Passive
01	One way of education that is easily accepted and understood by the wider community regarding fauna		V
02	Wider (The wider) community are easily accept (accepted) and understand with pictures	V
03	This potential should be used as a learning platform		V
04	Learning platform (platforms) must use this potential	V
05	wildlife identification books, which are often discussed in the world of lectures		V
06	there must be a visualization of the wildlife being discussed		V
07	a photographer can spend months living in the wild	V
08	wildlife photography can teach us how to coexist with wild animals without disturbing and destroying their habitat	V
09	One of the results that can be enjoyed by the wider community		V
10	The wider community can enjoy the results	V

 

 

D. List of Vocabulary

No	Vocabulary	Pronoun Spelling	Meaning
01	Equatorial	iekwe’toriel	Khatulistiwa
02	Biodiversity	bīōdiˈvərsədē	Keanekaragaman hayati
03	Provision	pre`vizyen	Persediaan
04	Clarifying	klærefaying	Mengklarifikasi
05	Inseparable	in`seperebel	Tak terpisahkan
06	Implies	im`plaiz	Menyiratkan
07	Connoisseurs	`kane`ser	Penikmat
08	Coexist	kowig`zist	Hidup bersama
09	Existence	eg`zistens	Adanya
10	Scattered	skætered	Berserakan

 

 

E. Tenses an d It’s Pattern

 

Please identify the tenses of ten sentences you take from the article. Learn the matrix clues below.

1. Indonesia is a country that is crossed by the equatorial emerald line and has a tropical climate. This geographical condition causes the abundance of biodiversity, both flora, and fauna, to be found in Indonesia. However, many people do not realize that Wildlife Photography is an inseparable part of today's wildlife learning model.

2. As the name implies, Wildlife Photography, this field photography focuses on capturing wildlife in the wild.

3. Wildlife photography requires photographers not only to take pictures but also to be able to tell what and why the wildlife behaves like this so that later the message or content of the photo can be conveyed properly to readers and connoisseurs. In producing wildlife photos, a photographer can spend months living in the wild, both just to observe the patterns and behavior of the target, to get ready to find the best position and time to take pictures.

4. “Photographing is not just taking pictures”, this sentence is suitable to be embedded in wildlife photo hunting activities.

5. Some preparations such as research on behavior and habitat conditions regarding the types of animals to be photographed to the preparation of camera equipment and location permits are absolute to be prepared before the shooting process.

6. to use image or photo media is considered good for use and is used in the teaching and learning process as an educational medium because this image media tends to attract students' attention so that there will be motivation to know about the images described. More than that, it is Wildlife Photography that encourages to keep loving biodiversity, especially wildlife, and participates in introducing wildlife to the wider community so that if it is properly educated, it is hoped that the rate of extinction of wildlife can be prevented and avoided.

7. This potential should be used as a learning platform for the younger generation, knowledge about biodiversity continues to grow so that in the future it can be a provision to love and maintain sustainable biodiversity. One way of education that is easily accepted and understood by the wider community regarding fauna is through the media of photography.

8. National Geographic, BBC, to books related to wildlife, there must be a visualization of the wildlife being discussed. Even

wildlife identification books, which are often discussed in the world of lectures, also do not escape the subject of photography as part of clarifying the picture of the wild animals to be identified.

9. This is based on the fact that photographing wildlife is different from photographing other objects, many things must be prepared and the ethics that must be considered in photographing this wildlife.

10. Therefore, it can be said that wildlife photography can teach us how to coexist with wild animals without disturbing and destroying their habitat.

11. One of the results that can be enjoyed by the wider community from the existence of Wildlife Photography is books and magazines about wildlife which are now scattered everywhere.

12. Today, the term "Wildlife Photography" is increasingly being heard and found because of the success of existing media, both digital and conventional.

 

F. Translation into Indonesia

 

Please translate the article into Indonesia

 

Wildlife Photography : Edukasi Satwa Liar Melalui Media Fotografi

 

Indonesia merupakan negara yang dilewati garis zamrud khatulistiwa dan memiliki iklim tropis. Kondisi geografis inilah yang menyebabkan melimpahnya keanekaragaman hayati baik flora maupun fauna ditemukan di Indonesia. Potensi ini sudah sepatutnya digunakan sebagai wadah pembelajaran bagi generasi muda supaya pengetahuan mengenai kenakeragaman hayati tetap tumbuh sehingga kedepannya dapat menjadi bekal untuk mencintai dan menjaga keanekaragaman hayati ini tetap lestari. Salah satu cara edukasi yang mudah diterima dan dipahami masyarakat luas berkaitan dengan fauna yaitu melalui media fotografi.

 

Dewasa ini, istilah “Wildlife Photography” semakin sering didengar dan ditemukan

karena semakin berjayanya media-media yang ada baik digital maupun konvensional. National geographic, BBC, hingga buku-buku yang berkaitan dengan satwa liar pasti terdapat visualisasi dari satwa liar yang sedang dibahas. Buku-buku identifikasi satwa liar pun yang sering dibahas dalam dunia perkuliahan juga tak luput dari urusan fotografi sebagai bagian untuk memperjelas gambaran mengenai satwa liar yang akan diidentifikasi. Namun, banyak orang yang belum menyadari bahwa Wildlife Photography atau fotografi satwa liar merupakan bagian yang tak bisa dilepaskan dalam model pembelajaran satwa liar masa kini.

 

Sesuai dengan namanya yakni Wildlife Photography, bidang fotografi ini berfokus untuk mengabadikan kehidupan satwa liar di alam bebas. Tidak seperti memotret hewan

di kebun binatang, atau di penangkaran. Wildlife photography menuntut fotografer tidak hanya memotret, namun juga bisa menceritakan apa dan mengapa satwa liar tersebut berperilaku seperti ini sehingga nantinya pesan atau isi dari foto tersebut dapat tersampaikan dengan baik kepada para pembaca maupun penikmat. Dalam menghasilkan foto wildlife, seorang fotografer bisa menghabiskan waktu berbulan-bulan hidup di alam liar baik untuk sekadar mengamati pola dan perilaku target, hingga bersiap mencari posisi dan waktu terbaik untuk memotret.

 

“Memotret tidak hanya sekedar memotret”, kalimat tersebut cocok untuk disematkan dalam kegitan berburu foto wildlife. Hal ini didasarkan karena memotret satwa liar berbeda dengan memotret objek lain, sangat banyak hal-hal yang harus dipersiapkan serta etika yang diperhatikan dalam meotret satwa liar ini. Beberapa persiapan seperti riset tentang perilaku dan kondisi habitat mengenai jenis satwa yang akan difoto hingga persiapan alat kamera dan perizinan lokasi mutlak untuk dipersiapkan sebelum proses pengambilan gambar. Maka dari itu dapat dikatakan bahwa wildlife photography dapat mengajari kita untuk bagaimana dapat hidup berdampingan dengan satwa liar tanpa harus mengganggu dan merusak habitatnya.

 

Salah satu hasil yang dapat dinikmati masyarakat luas dari adanya Wildlife Photography yaitu buku-buku dan majalah mengenai satwa liar yang kini sudah tersebar dimana-mana. Pembelajaran menggunakan media gambar atau foto dinilai juga baik di gunakan dan di terapkan dalam proses belajar mengajar sebagai media edukasi karena media gambar ini cenderung sangat menarik hati siswa sehingga akan muncul motivasi untuk lebih ingin mengetahui tentang gambar yang dijelaskan. Lebih dari itu, Wildlife Photography mendorong untuk tetap mencintai keanekaragaman hayati khususnya satwa liar serta berpartisipasi mengenalkan satwa liar masyarakat luas sehingga apabila sudah teredukasi dengan baik harapannya laju kepunahan satwa liar dapat ditekan dan dihindari.

 

 

G. Please sum-up the article by explaing the reason why author use the tenses.

 

because the article is included in descriptive text, so it uses a lot of simple present tense.

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PBLL EDITING By Arlu Zahra Zalika

Editorial Skill In English Publipreneur Based

Language Learning

(PBLL-Editing)

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Made by:

 

Arlu Zahra Zalika (21310015)

 

1C CLASS

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

FOTOGRAFI MAJOR

 

POLITEKNIK NEGERI MEDIA KREATIF JAKARTA

 (2021)

 

Practical Simulation Sheet

 Publipreneur Based Language Learning

(PBLL-Editing)

 

 

 

The Learning Portfolios must be collected as follows:

1. The Original Group Work of PPT (Power Point)

2. Approval used of Editorial Symbols in Pair’s Group

3. Neatly typed of revised edition

4. Printed Edition of Class Work Dummy

5. Individual Voice of Recording in youtube channel for possibility of getting A Grade

 

 

LEARNING TREATMENT
No	PBLL-Approach	Meeting	Portfolios	Learning Output	Learning Outcome
01	Prewriting	1-8 (UTS)	PPT Group, Mid-Test	Intend to be Self-Publishers (www.zalzulifa.com)	English for Special Purposes
02	Drafting
03	Revising
04	Editing
05	Publishing	9-16 (UAS	Book Dummy (PPT Group, Final-Test) Individual Voice in Video	Digital Publishing Member of www.polakata.com  by registering to www.polakata.com/addacc.pkt
06	Marketing
07	Delivering

 

EDITOIRAL SKILL IN ENGLISH

PUBLIPRENEUR-BASED LANGUAGE LEARNING

(PBLL-Editing)

 

 

IUNSTRUCTIONS
1. Use the red ink pen to mark your editorial findings 2. Write the name of manuscript’s writer within the box 3. Write your name as an editor within the editor’s box 4. Write the title of manuscript 5. Treat the draft as an accepted manuscript to the Editorial Department. 6. Edit the manuscript by using the editorial signs 7. Put  the number of your editorial findings (mechanical, substantive, pictorial)  within the box right-side 8. Write your verbal verification either suggestion, comment, or input  for the manuscript’s improvement. 9. Give your editorial judgment  about manuscript from the perspective of prewriting, drafting, revising, editing, publishing, marketing, delivering) 10. Good Luck.. be your best.
Students’ Identity		Writer			Editor
Name		Putri Sa'adah 21310074			Arlu Zahra Zalika 21310015
Study Program		Fotografi			Fotografi
Title of Manuscript		Article About Photography
C=Competence :  NC= Non Competence
No	Editorial Findings		Number	Key Word		C	NC
A	Mechanical Editing
	· Types · Jenis		5	getting (get) there are many things that must (many things must) these wildlife (this wildlife) which are (that are) or in captivity (or captivity)			V
	· Words · Kata		7	geographic (Geographic) image (images) to (us to) Photographer (A photographer)  Wider (The wider) accept (accepted) platform (platforms)			V
	· Phrase			-
	· Clause
	· Punctuations						V
	· Comma		1	flora and (flora, and)			V
	· Colon			-
	· Semi Colon			-
	· Preposition			-
	· Dictions			-
B	Substantive Editing
	· Content Accuracy			-
	· Language Consistency
	· Message Originality			Article from the internet
	· Reader’s Interest
	· Coherence
C	Pictorial Editing
	· Harmony			-
	· Balancing			-
	· White Space			-
	· Color			-
Verbal Verification:       Overall this article is quite good and interesting to read, but there is some vocabulary that must be improved.
Editorial Judgment     It will be more interesting if added photos to the article, even if it is not actually okay because overall this article is already good.